Lines Critique.

Downtown: The line study itself demonstrates regularity which keeps with the buildings repetitious pattern of windows.  I took some of the bricks to make a more gradual transition between the photo and the study, which was previously to sharp.  The text is aligned with the line study/window extension, but it might not be adding any thing to it compositionally and it may have so kerning issues.  The sharp clean lines of the typeface I believe express some of the fast, sleek, and tall nature of the downtown area.  The building itself represents some of the business/living aspects of downtown.  In each of these I tried to use symmetry, asymmetry, and alignment between the line studies, the photograph, and the negative space.  The study and the photo should both represent aspects of downtown while the negative space should emphasis some aspect that is not present.

In this composition I'm trying to again use alignment, symmetry, and repetition.  The type is more integrated into the structure of the building, and plays against the thin vertical lines of the windows.  At the same time the line weight may need to be thicker because of the large blocks between the building segments.  The transition between the building and the study in this composition is much more abrupt than the previous one.  I cut the sections of the windows away from the side of the building and brought the line study up through those spaces to make more of a vertical flow between them.

For this composition I went further with editing out the front facing windows and placing them between two line study segments.  Taking out the windows except for the ones that are open gives it a sense of vacancy.  The text may need to have more presence and be aligned better to the established grid.  The composition  shows continuation and alignment.

With these compositione I tried again to draw attention, through alignment and continuation, to the negative space at the bottom.  The text may need to go toward the bottom for clarity.

I also tried to blend the lines between the building and the line study by bringing in parts of the building into the study and vice-versa.  Text alignment may be an issue.

This was meant to mimic my first iteration, and also give more emphasis on the line study through form and repetition.

The line studies for the midtown compositions are supposed to keep in line with the easier flow of the neighborhood in comparison to the downtown area.  I experimented with staying truer to the original line studies but it seems to busy.  Also placing the text in the bottom area does not feel right.  I ended up trying to take out allot of the original path and continuing the line study up till the upper slice of the image.  I need more of that part to make that work well though.  The text mimics the lines of that part of the photo.

In both of these the bottom half is far to busy and the text does not feel attached enough to the rest of the composition.